Wednesday, 9 April 2014

The Mysterious Look - Not A Mystery Anymore!

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Once Upon A Time...
Is How All Stories Begin.

Isn't It?
But, This Is Not A Mainstream Story!

So, It Begins Like...

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The Evening Of 13 January 2014...
Was Meant To Be A Special One.


The Excitement For Lohri Celebrations Was In The Air.
But Here, We Witnessed An Exception!

Apart from Lohri, Birthday Wishes Had Cast A Joyous Spell...
Especially When It Was Someone's Eighteenth!


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And As The Clock Struck 1800 Hours...

We Found The Princess Of The Family...

Making A Star - Studded Appearance...

Among The Family Members...

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Why Of Course...

The Cake Cutting Was To Be Followed By Bonfire...

Bonfire...

Popcorn...

Peanuts...

And Jaggery!


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The Princess Was An Adult Now...

The Day Marked A Double Celebration...

And There Was Gaiety All Around...

More So, Because She Was The Only Girl Among A Future Generation Of Boys...

A Sister Among Three Brothers...

The Apple Of Her Grandma's Eyes...

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With The Cake Cutting Ceremony, Having Been Performed...

Now, Was The Time For The Family...

To Proceed To The Bonfire...

The Pious Ceremony At Lohri...

A Ritual...

Performed Year After Year...

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And Then...

She Caught Them Looking At Her...

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Who?

Her Brothers...

Looking At Her...

And Her Granny!

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With A Quick Mind...

And Sharp Observation...

She Was Quick To Understand...

There Was Something Fishy...

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Her Brothers Had Taken Charge Of Distributing The Jaggery & Peanuts As प्रसाद After The Bonfire...

Then & There...

She Told Her Granny, Not To Take It...

Neither Did She Take It...

Called Up At 100, To Unmask Their Trickery...

The 'प्रसाद' Meant For Granny And Her... 

Examined By Sniffer Dogs...

It Turned Out To Contain Poison!


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And, She Stood Testimony To Her Brothers' Clever Plan...

She'd Overheard Them...

Planning To Spoil Her Birthday...

Which Implied...

Planning To Spoil The Will, Which Granny Was To Sign...

In Her Name...

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Her Brothers Were Held Guilty...

A Shame In The Name Of Family...

A Shame In The Name Of Relationships...




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Lest...

 There Was No Blood...

There Was No Murder...

There Was No Gloom...

Only Righteousness Prevailed...

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This post is a part of the WordPress Daily Prompts : 365 Writing Prompts program where the aim is to post at least one post a day based on the day's prompt.

Today's Prompt was a 'Free Prompt' provided to all of us, Guest Authors.


The Prompt is, Do Over - 'Go Back To A Blog Post That You Have Written And Try And Offer A New Perspective Or A Different Ending To It.'

The Post Which I'd Chosen To Twist, As You Might Have Guessed Is - The Mysterious Look... - Which Was Written As A Response To BlogAdda's WOW! Prompt Back In December 2013.

You've Witnessed The Twist Yourself! :D
Now, You Tell Me, If That Was Good, Or This Is Better...

This is my Eighth Post as a guest author to Project 365 : We Post Daily!

16 comments:

  1. Nice, a small yet nice story with some suspense, intrigue and a murder attempt built into it, all in your own very unique style of posting.

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    1. Thanks, for the appreciation, and the visit, Jairam!
      Keep Visiting. :)

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  2. Wonderful story, Poonam. Great flow if words. Nice that the princess discovered the plan. :)

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    1. Thanks for the appreciation, Anita!
      Keep Visiting. :)

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    1. I'm glad you loved it, Naba!
      Keep Visiting. :)

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  4. Intelligent girl, your character in the story. :)

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    1. She sure is.
      Thanks Indrani!
      Keep Visiting. :)

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  5. What a build up Poonam and stories must be etched like that. Brilliance personified:)

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  6. Wonderfully woven Poonam....enjoyed it really... :-)

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    1. I'm glad you enjoyed it Maniparna!
      Keep Visiting. :)

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